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Book: Love is All (Requested Oneshots)
Author: MeowMeow422
Genre: Short Story and Fanfic
Cover: 75/100 Okay, to start with, your cover is lacking in quite a few things, the biggest being what I like to call the “Read Me!” factor. What I’m basically saying is that your cover lacks in making your readers interested and excited to read your book. Based off of the watermark in the corner, I’m assuming you didn’t make your cover, but it’s very simple, and kind of all over the place. I would suggest finding an image to be the center of attention on your cover. Something that really draws people in. Maybe make it one of the main ships in your story, large and in the center, but don’t make it over-powering, with your title above it. Don’t use images from Google though, create something original, and if you struggle with creating covers, you can always ask the Wattpad community to help you out! And put your name on there somewhere. Be proud of your work!
Blurb: 80/100 Short and sweet. But also intriguing. That’s what a blurb should be. Something about your story that, just like your cover, makes your readers want to read. Personally, I love your blurb, and it definitely intrigues me. But maybe, it’s a little too intriguing? It doesn’t really say much about what your book is. So, my suggestion is this, add an extra paragraph saying something like, “Enjoy this collection of short stories featuring your favorite characters, and a whole lot of love…” or whatever you choose. Just make sure your readers know what they’re about to read. Another suggestion is to change the wording on a few of your sentences to make it flow a little better. For example, remember to use contractions. (Remember this when writing anything!) This will always, always, make your writing more natural and your readers happier. I’ve fixed it for you:
It isn’t merely sweaty palms…
See? A simple fix. And in the last sentence, because the comma looks a little bit awkward there, you could change it to:
Because… love is all.
This also makes it a little more dramatic, which is the effect you're going for.
First Impressions: 65/100 (Forever Home)
Okay… since there were quite a few serious grammatical issues, I’ve decided to break down each one.
Tense - Excuse me while I put on my English teacher voice… Ahem… Past, present, and future. Those are three kinds of tenses that you can use while writing, and the tense you chose to use was, well, all of them. For the most part, you used present tense to write your story, which was your first mistake. It’s perfectly fine to use present tense if you know how to use it well, and unfortunately, this story is not a good example. Luckily for you, past tense is a much easier alternative and is usually the norm for most stories. It’s easier to remain consistent when you write in past tense, or it is my experience, and in this story part, your tense is very inconsistent. So if your heart is set on present tense, here are some mistakes you need to fix:
