You are great at describing things! So much detail, I love it. Also nice introduction. There a few parts that could have been worded differently. Sometimes what I do is I go to stories with like a million views and see how they write things, I try to figure out their format. Other than it was great so to all my lovelies out there who love to read be sure to c h e c k i t o u t.
-divergent_lover4646
