transfiguration | character review

。foolish

TITLE: Foolish
AUTHOR: --timeless
PROTAGONIST: Bellatrix Black
CHAPTERS: 8 (ongoing)
SUMMARY: Sometimes love isn't meant to last forever.

REVIEW:
Despite the few misinterpretations, Bellatrix's character is generally well-portrayed. You captured the fact that she is sadistic and dark and not completely outgoing like most people make her out to be-I might have just made her a tiny bit more dedicated to the Dark Arts and the whole affiliation to the Death Eaters; Bellatrix is possibly Voldemort's most dedicated follower in the whole lot.

The story itself was written in a simple style, and was easy to read, if you neglect the few grammatical errors here and there (/!\ your/you're and to/too). The plot is quite cliché, but it isn't a problem if you're into that kind of stories.

The only real problem was possibly the temporal frame where there were a few glitches here and there; Bellatrix was born in 1951 while Sirius was born in 1959-they therefore could not have gone to school at the same time. The other problem was that the characters wear modern outfits from nowadays-skinny jeans and other outfits that would not have existed in the sixties.

But besides from that, you did a good job, author dearest, and kudos to you. Bellatrix is a complex character and writing about her isn't specifically easy at all.

(reviewed by kencbi)