Title: Sweetly Bitter
Author: 2702era
Reviewer: ScarredHeroes
Description + Book Cover: 4.5/5
The book cover is something i never expected it to be! So beautiful! The clarity and the effort you've put into it shows how much interest you have in your book!
As for your description, I have no major issues. But I do have a doubt regarding it.
The sweetly bitter poetic journey of an individual, who's broke but not broken.
By 'broke' do you mean have no money or means to survive?
Because if this is what it means, then it's related to the title and appropriate to the context.
If not, then rewrite the description in context to the reason why you are writing a poetry book.
Punctuation + Grammar: 3.5/5
But, I won't.
They consider their's ;
To be prime.
The highlighted punctuation mark is a semi colon, used to join to independent phrases. This is not the right usage of this mark. You don't need to use commas nor any mark in case the words form a full sentence.
But, I won't.
They consider theirs
to be prime.
As for grammar, I would recommend using more metaphors to express your feelings in complex and multidimensional manner.
This allows readers to interpret your poems differently and associate to their personal memories or feelings.
Use more 'pretty' words that people rarely ever use. Make them open their dictionary, make them wonder in awe as you string your words together.
Writing Style: 3.5/5
Usually, poetry never sticks to one style as it's upto the poet. Here, your poetry focuses on emotion, which you've done a formidable job in articulating your feelings.
But, I feel that you could expand your whole poetry writing as a whole. Starting with grammar to using inanimate objects to express your emotions.
Readers like direct poems, but every poem doesn't need to be direct. Use your imagination, the objects around in and allow your skills to form coherent and thoughtful poems.
I cannot judge the poems you've written based on the message conveyed, but more on the lines of evolution of your idea being conveyed.
Your poems, with the enhanced vocabulary, will hold a certain uniqueness.This is something every young poet combats. It also mean you are on the right track on poetry writing.
To overcome this, I recommend reading every genre of books, including poetry.
Aesthetic Sense + Mood Setting: 3.5/5
You've done excellent in trying to convey your thoughts into phrases, but in certain areas, you tend to repeat the same style.
This is something that is overlooked when the poems are telling stories, but your set of poems happens to be evolving around personal thoughts.
I feel like you just pen down what you feel and arrange it in poetry verse. But, in order to rivet your readers, I suggest your make it more complex.
The whole reason of reading poems is to think and fascinate readers as well as yourself. Ask yourself certain question from different perspectives, think from different point of views.
The various moods you poems convey do have an effect, albeit not to effective. This can be achieved by using more complex words and phrases, like I've mentioned above.
OVERALL SCORE: 15/20
Your book is an effort that will never go in vain to your learning in poetry. This book may not be your best but it your first step and your first step is very important. The mistakes you make, the things you learn from your first poetry book will aid you in the process of writing. You might get even more better ideas and may be able to weave your way through the art of writing poetry that inspires not only your readers, but also yourself.
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