Title: Lockdown's Our Cupid
Author: SAANVI005
Reviewer: WomanBehindWords
Summary: 3/5
I personally like a summary with blurbs/scenes from the story in them. It actually makes me really excited about the story. But in your case, it was just the blurb, which also isn't present in the story. Not the ideal move to attract readers.
Here's a tip, try to write your description like the paid stories. Write an one liner that will decribe your story the best; maybe a attention catching line then write a very small paragraph about your story.
Grammar: 5/5
Your grammar is on point, seriously there is not a single mistake that I have found in your story.
Character Building: 3/5
Not going to sugarcoat it but character development could have been a lot more beautiful if you have taken some time to get us adjusted to the protagonist, you kinda threw your readers into the middle of the story.
Again here's a tip: try to shorten the chapters in words and make it broader with chapters. It will interest the readers to get to know about your story a lot better.
You can also give the characters their own time and space to grow, that's why shorter chapters are preferable.
Writing Style: 2/5
Alright this may not sound good, but the writing style didn't work for me, although I like your idea of changing the font of your dialouges as "Italics". It drew my sttention right to the dialouge, but again here's a problem, it drew me more to the dialouges and kinda make me shift my attention away from the rest of the story.
Another thing, don't introduce your character like this "Hi, I'm blah blah blah, and i live in here and cant find work..." this will be the laziest way you can introduce your characters, don't this, believe me i have tried it and doesnt work.
Here's a tip: try to introduce them through others, like someone calling there name, or at the end of the chapter, although I strongly prefer the former one.
Plot: 4/5
I enjoyed it a lot, your characters are fun but not totally relatable but fun. As I mentioned above, write your stories with short words of chapters and more chapters in number.
You don't have to rush to finish a story just because its a short story. Take your sweet time and go for it!
OVERALL SCORE: 17/25
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