The Reader's POV: Review Book {CLOSED}

Roses & Guns ☆ Carrots

Author: Bunnybeebooo

Reviewer: __Carrots__

Chapters Reviewed: Five

o First Impressions:

Blurb wise:

The way you introduced Theo , Anastasia and Ashton in your blurb was a very smart idea. You showed adversity in all three of their lives, which urges readers to know what happened and what follows.

There are three different stories working through the blurb finally merging into one final mystery.

So yes, the way you divided the elements of it in three different paragraphs yet showing that they are all but the same, connected at the roots was an excellent way of framing your blurb.

Cover wise:

The cover is well done, I like it. It fits the aesthetic and gives off a mysterious vibe.

The way you seeped in the elegant font with the background is really skillful. And the girl in the gown, holding a gun in itself was a very creative idea. From the number of chapters that I have read, I think your cover and the theme suits Anastasia's personality and the way you have portrayed her very accurately

Title wise:

Roses & Guns, that's a title that tells us exactly what your story is about. And that is what we want right? A title that acts as a window into the book.

Over all, I must say you did a very very very good job at uniting your book cover with your book title.

So yes, First impressions; check! ✔

o Storyline/ Plot :

I love it!

Your book has an original story idea with a great execution. From the first chapter till the end of the fifth chapter your storyline was beautifully shown and expressed.

The plot is again very different that covers a theme that is extremely interesting at the same time uncommon.

I like the plot and I believe it has the potential to take your book towards recognition, good luck!

o Character Development:

Bunny, can I call you Bunny?

Bunny, you have no idea how much I enjoyed reading your book. And this was primarily thanks to your fantastic character development skills!

Honestly, I don't know what to say because I found no, I repeat I found no fault in your development skills. Roses & Guns has five influencing characters up till where I have read;

Theo, Anastasia, Ashton, Liam and Ivory. And can I just say that not one of those characters were biased. All had their own personalities that in no way crashed into the other character's personality, making a book with so many influential characters an amazing read!

One thing that I wanted to mention were your castings. Especially Theo, Liam and Alex's castings.

I CANNOT see their faces. Yes, I believe and I totally agree that these type of poses and backgrounds and color schemes are appealing, but honestly they do nothing to give your characters a distinct identity.

I have no idea how Liam looks like, the only thing I know is that he has beautiful hair. That's it. The same goes for the case of Theo and Alex Flynn. So yes, try to put up a clear face claim of your characters.

Grammatical errors and Typos :

Nope.

None, Zero.

And if there were a few mistakes here and there, they were simple typos that can always be rectified with fresh editing. So kudos! Your editing game is on par!

One thing, always try to strengthen your certainty when using words and also when including those terminologies in your book that you are not well aware of.

Here like I promised, allow me to show you the difference between "sporting" and "spotting".

See, according to "Google";

"Sport" is to wear a piece of covering, whereas "Spot" is to notice something, as in "I spotted a black sheep" or to have a stain that is noticeable.

Now let's quote your sentence from the book, " Anastasia Rossette spotting a blood- red, full sleeved satin gown, her hair pulled up in a classic bun."

Now, does any of the two meanings of "spot" go with the context of your sentence? I don't think so.

Writing Style :

Your writing style is mostly good, fluent and consistent. But sometimes you seem to have written in a way that makes your writing overly fast paced, jumping from one situation to another almost instantly without any track of how the situation came to be.

Some paragraphs are a bit wordy, try getting rid of useless linking words like "if" and "of", as long as you can do without linking words, do so.

In chapter three, when Ashton discovers his parents' frame inside Xavier's room, I feel you could do better with your expressions. Try to make that situation more expressive. Throw in feelings, you have tried yes, but it's not receiving the sort of reaction it could.

Other than that, your writing style goes amazingly hand in hand with the theme and aura of your book. It carries with it a vibe of mystery. Your adaptation of a mystery aura in your book is very well.

And I love the way you end your chapters! Seriously, girl how do you do that?!

All the five chapters have ended in such an incredible style that we have to, we have to scroll to the next chapter.

You are an amazing writer. 😉

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So, that's it. That's my review.

If there are any further questions and suggestions please comment.

If you think that some parts of the review didn't stand up to your expectations, and also that you found it confusing, please let me know.

Zainab

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