BookieBat

@ BookieBat  Thank you so much to have took the time. I totally understand your point and, to be honest, the beginning is THE thing that I wanted to maybe rewrite. Something was bothering me since I wrote the first paragraph but I couldn't put my finger on it, now I see what it was and I am so sorry for it I didn't even realized it was that similar before told me, but for the mother, I have a reason for the obvious similarity. I wanted to make her to be something very specific, I have the whole development and even though I tried my hardest to make her different, I couldn't. The reason for this is that my inspiration for her is my grandmother and sadly she is very similar to the mother in your story, I just made her more cruel and that's it. But even with the best reasons, it's no excuse and I am truely sorry.
            
            If you give me the permission, I love the idea of the outside root cell and I would love to change the beginning and use it. Thank you so much to believe in me, you have no idea how much it's means. I will keep in mind everything you said and  continue to work on it. I'm really happy that you liked my ideas and for the voices, I can tell you that you're on the right track. For they're identify, stick around, no obligation thought but, I think you will like it.  (So sorry for the atrocity of my response, I just saw your message and wanted to answer but I didn't sleep since +48 hours )

I don’t mean this to sound mean. But…for it not being the same so far it has a lot in common with mine. Monster carved in her flesh, kept in the basement, mother interested in all things shiny and that make her appear wealthy, running away to reach her father after finding the info on a piece of paper. I am intrigued by the voices she keeps hearing but I wish you had come up with an interesting new take on it and not just details chosen from mine. There are many ways you could portray her mother for instance. There are many things that could be done to this child. She could be kept locked in an attic, empty room, outside root cellar, just anything really. But you went with a slab of concrete in a basement like me. Tell your story babes. You clearly have some cool ideas! You don’t need to pattern it after mine. 
            
            I believe you are heading in a new direction but your beginning is so close to mine it’s a little…I think people who’ve read mine will be like oh right yeah I’ve read this. But don’t give up! Seriously the more you write the better you’ll get at it, as far as grammar etc goes. And I really think you have an interesting concept with the ghosts/voices. I’m very curious as to who it is that keeps speaking to her. 

@BookieBat that's great news, I love that story

@ BookieBat  Yay! Congratulations! This must be celebrated

@BookieBat yay!!!  thats so good to hear tho!! three cheers for that justice lol

Thank you so much I’m glad you enjoyed it! I’m working on some stuff but real life ya know? ‍♀️ I have no timeline for when I’ll be finished. I do hope to have something soon

That’s really sweet. I’m well. How are you?

Aww thanks beau