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❄ THE WRAITH | ALEX ❄

Book Title: The Wraith

Author: 99problemstosolve

Reviewed by: Iuminology

The review was edited by Lone_Beauty_14

Cover: 3/10

The cover isn't bad at all, but it's a bit plain compared to the other book covers out there. The shade of blue is really generic and the mountain is too faint to be seen.

Title: 10/10

Your title very clearly relates to the story. It makes sense which is also really great.

Blurb: 4.5/10

You forgot the "H" in "Wraith," making the entire blurb aesthetically unappealing. Also, in your overall description you kept switching pronouns which made me severely confused. Is your main character a she? a he? Do they go by both pronouns? It's unclear and isn't given the proper exposition if they do go by both pronouns. Other than that, I loved your blurb! It was intriguing and established a mystery that made me want to read your story.

Creativity and Originality: 8.5/10

The plot of your story is very original! It builds on the concept of a wraith which is very new and something that not a lot of people write about. Also, the poems you put in the beginning of the chapters were well written and super creative and interesting! However, it feels like any other fantasy novel where the main character fights for their survival. There's nothing new about that, but your writing makes up for this and does this incredibly well!

Plot and Flow: 6/10

The chapters are really short and don't reveal too much of a plot, but what I like so far is very interesting. I couldn't fully grasp the plot and it was really confusing since the only thing that has happened is your main character killing the wraith, which is already revealed in the blurb. Once you publish more chapters and reveal more of the plotline, I'm sure your story will be amazing!! Something that ruined the flow was the pictures you put in the middle of the chapters. They might fit better in the beginning of the chapters.

Character Development: 6.5/10

There isn't enough for me to grasp any character development, but I did like how you wrote about the impact of the main character's father dying and how that drives them towards their revenge, and it is going to be super interesting on how you are going to further advance this development and whether this is going to impact your character(s) negatively or positively.

Writing Style: 7/10

Your writing style is AMAZING!!! Your writing is super descriptive and flowery, which I absolutely love! The pictures you put in the chapters were very beautiful, but were unnecessary. Your writing is amazing and descriptive enough, to the point where pictures aren't really needed. Just leave the rest to the reader's imagination. You've done your part in the talented writing. Now you just have to trust them to imagine the world you're building. On the more technical side, there were many grammatical errors that ruined the reading experience for me.

Genre Relevance: 10/10

This is very clearly a fantasy and the short chapters really make it feel like a short story!

Overall: 55.5/90

Despite the many grammatical errors and the lack of a plot (so far), your story is amazingly written and shows how talented of a writer you are. The plot and characters are not yet fully developed, but clearly show the beginnings of amazing storytelling. I'm extremely excited to see what you do next with the story and how you plan to develop your main character.

Tips 

You should look up research on different personality types and do research on morally grey characters. I think that your story could benefit really well from adding the depth and complexity of adding some aspects of a morally gray character.