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Review: World Leaders

Title: World Leaders
Author: AakashBansal2
Genre: Mystery/Thriller

Cover:

About the cover, I fail to see how a bunch of clouds relate to your story. Did you mean to show the new world that you've introduced in your book?

Your title can barely be seen against the white clouds. I suggest moving it to the center for better visibility.

If the phrase, "The Fall Of Humanity", is your subtitle, I suggest making it smaller and placing it at the top of the cover in place of the title.

Your name can barely be seen at all, please enlarge it and place it somewhere else.

Title:

In the three chapters that I read, the title did not make sense.

That's fine, some published books have titles that don't make sense until you finish the entire book. However, readers generally don't mind if published books do that, because they've paid money to read those books. On Wattpad, a reader can easily close a book and move onto another one if the book fails to interest them.

Maybe you could change it to something like "Lost: The Story of a New God" or something like that. (Feel free to take my opinions with a grain of salt)

Summary:

The start of the summary, while thought provoking, is just filler. The filler is six sentences and there are just two sentences related to the plot. A rewrite may be in order.

Just pick a sentence or two out of the filler that you really liked. Add some plot related points like the earth was almost destroyed and is now inhabited by a new species, a boy was given a mysterious holy book to read and so on. Just don't go overboard and tell the entire story in your summary.