The last vision by blare_spark_2005
I love your beginning and all the characters and the "she" character. Your whole entire story is creepy as hell. But it's great. The only thing I would think about is that plot. It's great but it seems rushed and has minor gaps here and there. Your character development is super great and needs no improvement. Your whole story is amazing and I love it.
I give you a 4.5 out of 5 stars.
Any further questions pm me kilzard
