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THE WINNER OF THE SECOND PROMPT ____________________
CONGRATULATIONS
Hungry by Evanaissante
PREVIEW:
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REVIEW:
The world we dive in while reading your story is extremely dark and yet brilliantly explained, with metaphors, comparisons and enough details for us to visualise the scene perfectly. Your portrayal of Greyback is amazing, and the relation he entertains with your original character is well written and one can easily understand how immoral and twisted it is with only a glance at their relationship. The plot was clear and easy to understand, the writing was fluid, and the story bore no grammatical errors either. All in all, you did a wonderful job and you have the whole team's congratulations!
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OTHER PARTICIPANTS WITH GORGEOUS ENTRIES
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Painted In Colour by Kaitlin-Dakota
REVIEW:
Your entry was heart warming and cute to read, with a curious Oliver Wood and a very peculiar original character to whom one can grow attached despite the shortness of you work. It was fairly cliché yet sweet, and we can tell that you have improved since your last entry—keep up the hard work! There were still a few grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing too important, and the story was quite easy to understand as well. Well done!
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mcilfoys's one shot
REVIEW:
Your portrayal of Theo during the war was actually really interesting and gave a completely different perspective on the character, which was refreshing in a way, and the relation he develops with Luna is peaceful and harmless and cute. It was also a great idea to talk about the times with the Carrow siblings at Hogwarts since barely no one writes about it (even though it had an important part in the books). There were however grammar mistakes here and there which sadly butchered certain bits in your entry, but nothing that cannot be fixed. Altogether you did a pretty good job!
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Sweet Love by spookyboibella
REVIEW:
Your story was emotional and showed an aspect of Tonks's life that little people cover—her sexuality. The idea of a muggle original character was actually good, and the relationship the two women shared was cute, even though slightly cliché. But Tonks's personality was well written and not out of character, which is extremely pleasing. The only major flaw was—aside from the few grammatical mistakes here and there—the end which was quite confusing and rather hard to understand. But you still did a good job nonetheless, and you have our congratulations!
