WATTY BOOKS CRITIC

5 Hounds And A Woman [6]

Author: Smilin01Moi

Genre: Romance/Humour

Rating: 6

Negative Review:
●I think there is a problem distinguishing which character is doing what and this makes the read difficult as I had to reread several times to know what was actually happening.

● At some points in your story, there is difficulty in blending words to bring to life a mental picture

● Ok dear, there were seriously loads of grammatical errors. [I pinpointed out some of them in the comment section.]

●Misuse of the pronouns and not using it where appropriate. This made it difficult to understand who was talking or doing an action.
       Example: when you use the word "man" when there are more than one masculine figure in that scene. How does one know which "man" you're referring to? And even if they finally do find out, it cuts with the flow of reading as a reader has to try figuring out who this "man" refers to before reading on.

●Misuse of commas.

● Misuse of past/present/future tense.

●Grammatical errors present in almost every line/sentence. 

●You spend so much time either repeating ideas already known or speaking of things that might not be necessary. This makes work boring.

●Adding to the statement above this one. Your chapters are too long.

●no suspense

●pints of clichés.

Positive Review:
●I'll give you a 4/5 for the book cover.

●Your beginning seems interesting, It kept me glued as the story line was good and I kept on asking myself. Geez! What's gonna happen next?

●The story line is good and captivating and funny but the grammatical errors killed my reading vibe.

●Your effort in describing your character was really good.

●Your characters seemed realistic.

●I was able to gain more personal informations on your characters.

●Love the title, fits with story plots and catchy.

●Summary is an Ok for me but still contains grammatical errors.

What to improve on:
●You can re-edit the grammatical errors maybe when you're done with the story.

●Use the pronouns he/she/his....etc correctly.

● Reread throughout and cut down indirect/direct repetitions of ideas already said.

●Try shortening the length of your chapters but don't remove vital details.

Sorry if I really stressed on the grammatical errors. It was the major loophole in the story and I tried to explain further so that you can understand.

In all this remember, it's your work and you've got the power to play with the mind of the readers effectively. Acknowledge this and use it to your advantage.

Best of luck!

🍃My honest review🍃
By the way love, I voted for all your chapters and left comments. Keep the good work.