@sicklysolar Hello! I just finished reading the latest chapter of your book and here's my opinion about it! (Also sorry for making you wait, I had to review for my exams next week)
The way you describe emotions:
I loved your way of describing the emotions in the story! It really adds in the character and shows the theme of the chapter, like "shaking, and shaking and shaking." It made alot of sense if you understood the meaning of it repeating!
The way you describe the actions of characters:
It's quite nice, I also like the magic scene! It really let's you imagine what it looks like and that's a very nice skill! It also let's you get absorbed into the story.
The Plot:
Is it an Enemy's to lovers story or a yandare one? Still haven't figured it out! Though I like the plot, there's some parts I cannot comprehend but that's really my own problem, not yours!
Overall:
Describing things - 10/10
Plot - 9/10 (A bit confusing but it's nice!)
Romance - 7/10 (Since I don't get it much but I also get it?)
Overall - Has potential! :D
I like the concept! There's just a bit confusion going in my head but you'll fix that on your own if you continue writing, writing takes practice and patience! I believe in you <33
Advice:
I believe you should have a goal when writing and an inspiration! So it can fuel your determination, and make you feel motivated to write more! Also try reading some popular Hogwarts books since it may give you some more experience since I've been trying to write in another app and I had read the same genre for about A LOT and it helped me learn more about the likes of readers and their dislikes! There's always that spilt side of "I dislike this." And "I love this!" So always try to read your comments but I can see you do since you reply to them once in a while!
Much love <333
