Auro_Loves_TomTord

Greetings, fellow human beings. I would like to recommend reading my newest stories, titled "Almost Opposites" and "Placeholder Title", as I spent a bit of time on them. I would like for you all to critique my writing, as I wish to become a better author. I would like to clarify that I am not trying to get reads, I am simply trying to get an outside perspective on my writing. As I have stated, I wish to become a better author, as I believe that with the right motivations, skills, and understanding of human psychology, I could possibly have it as a side hustle or maybe even a full time job. Thank you for reading this.
          	
          	Sincerely, an aspiring preteen

SouthPark_bitch

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          If you get...
          1 back = You are loved!
          3 back = You’re popular
          5 back = You are one of the most loveable people out there
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Auro_Loves_TomTord

Greetings, fellow human beings. I would like to recommend reading my newest stories, titled "Almost Opposites" and "Placeholder Title", as I spent a bit of time on them. I would like for you all to critique my writing, as I wish to become a better author. I would like to clarify that I am not trying to get reads, I am simply trying to get an outside perspective on my writing. As I have stated, I wish to become a better author, as I believe that with the right motivations, skills, and understanding of human psychology, I could possibly have it as a side hustle or maybe even a full time job. Thank you for reading this.
          
          Sincerely, an aspiring preteen

seabunnyblues

@OC_Queen_Gurl502 I'd love to see a rewrite of that fic! Glad my criticism served you well.
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OC_Queen_Gurl502

@_beachbum__ hey, the account you're replying to is dead, and im on this one now, but thank you for the criticism. I was going to rewrite the stories on my new main, this one. I was just gonna copy down everything and repost it, then see how it got better from there, but I'd love to hear more criticism from you, its a big help. Also, i totally agree, that texting scene was cringe.
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seabunnyblues

@Auro_Loves_TomTord *hope, I mean. I actually finished it this time instead of reading half of it. So a quick little critique. 
            
            Your book is way too dialogue heavy, you rely on exposition too much instead of letting your characters feel like characters instead of plot devices. The way you write their hatred for the new girl isn't realistic, either- they just hate her (from what I can tell) immediately instead of getting a good impression of her first before getting bad vibes. That's just bad storytelling, in my opinion.
            
            Everyone can improve if they try. I hope you read this and not think of me badly for explaining a bit of what I found troublesome. I'll be glad to offer more criticism if you'd like :>
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OC_Queen_Gurl502

Hello, other account

Auro_Loves_TomTord

@SmExY_hOmOsExUaL k
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SmExY_hOmOsExUaL

@OC_Queen_Gurl502 now if you'll excuse me im gonna go read your new book
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SmExY_hOmOsExUaL

@OC_Queen_Gurl502 one time in 5th grade i was doing math and came across      
             4-2=? and i had to think about the answer
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Auro_Loves_TomTord

May I ask for help? ... So, I'm writing a story, two in fact. Neither has been published, but I'm done with the first chapter of both stories. I need to know if I should publish the first chapter now, or if I should write a bit more, or maybe a few more chapters, before publishing them. What do you think I should do?

Auro_Loves_TomTord

@SmExY_hOmOsExUaL Ok, I did it
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Auro_Loves_TomTord

@SmExY_hOmOsExUaL Ok, I'll do that and tell you when it's done
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SmExY_hOmOsExUaL

@Auro_Loves_TomTord I think you should publish the first chapter so that you can get criticism from people so that then maybe you'll get more ideas
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