Black_Prinze
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damn, plan of seduction #2 in gay pride?
Black_Prinze
re reading a KWSE for funsies and I notice a lot of tiny spelling errors ;-;, anyways
kirlanda4ever
Hey! You responded to me on chpt 29 of Neal’s book and I didn’t want to post spoilers since I finished it. You aren’t a bad writer. Its just your plot is disjointed and your timeline is off. I’m not a writer, I just love reading and your characters are enjoyable. Their attitudes in conjunction with the story mesh well. Some could use some character development though. But with this story so much stuff feels abruptly ended or not explained. I see there is another book I must read, which I will soon; but I’m just confused how skylar’s book fits in with the things that’s already happened in this one. Ian’s character definitely needs to be fleshed out as many of the abandoned plot points deals directly with him. Examples: Shane/Diesel, the council, the whole issue with the power dynamic causing the need for a biological heir, who also turns out to be omega too, and the twins pack being able to bypass the power hungry council and just move into the forest. And whats with the 10 year old girl/god just running off on a mission and the parent being like meh? Ian needs his own book. But for Neal, his relationship dynamic with his brothers could be explored. It feels like its only hinted at here. And more fleshing out his relationship with Ian. You started to do that towards the end, but it honestly felt like his closeness to Ian came out of left field. In the beginning it seemed like they were guardian and child but later on you said they were basically the same age and it does not feel like that. Ian still feels like a parental figure years older because that’s how you wrote him. All in all, your book was entertaining but could definitely be improved and edited more. Its not bad, especially since you were in your early teens when you did it.
Black_Prinze
Hi! Sorry for such a late reply, I just got on break, but thank u for taking the time to comment (and not on the story itself snsnn). I see what u mean and I get the points ur making. I genuinely don’t promote CYBMPC bcs it’s so *everywhere* and I had no goals for it when I first wrote it - i was just a teen interested in boy x boy -, when I tried editing it (still as a teen) I only fixed grammar and terribly cringey moments and started on Neal’s story. Even now I have no real idea what’s going on in CYBMPC, and when I re-edited Neal’s story I simply wanted the whole series over w. That’s entirely on me. Rushing it and leaving things unfinished are things I’m trying to fix. And that’s why I decided on a one shot book for Elliot’s and Dayon’s stories. I didn’t want ppl who had seen them since the first book not getting anything in the end. (Ian needs his own book made me snort bcs yes, he does- I agree w all of ur points fr. I definitely am aware of flushing out relationships, especially w Neal and the characters in that book (again, rushing, entirely my fault really)). I don’t see myself going back to fix my stories anytime soon, at least not now, but when and if I do I will take ur points into consideration. I really appreciate ur criticism and hope that they won’t be reoccurring issues in future stories. Again, thank you, ♡
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Black_Prinze
Plan Of Seduction is #3 in LGBT??? I’m —
Black_Prinze
for anyone currently reading A Knight w/ Shining Eyes or planning on rereading it plz b aware that i’m currently in the process of re-writing it ^•ﻌ•^ฅ♡
Black_Prinze
it’s been years since I posted it but should I try and rewrite Can You Be My Prince Charming? Again, like x.x, would there be any point, be honest. I’m having an existential crisis over it hhh
Black_Prinze
this is a long one: _(:3 」∠)_ | (late but) A Knight W/ Shining Eyes (Neal x Eric) story is now complete ! ♡ Alongside this, Plan of Seduction (Logan x Tripp) is also complete ! ♡ I love both of these stories tremendously, and even when I might edit them in the far future I am glad with how they turned out and hope that you guys also enjoy them. I am so grateful for your constant & continuous support and I can’t wait to see what y’all think about these two stories.
koo_rar
estoy aquí para molestarte prq te quiero mucho
koo_rar
espero q todo esté bien. aish me vas a llamar cursi cuando veas estos msgs pero — creo q si soy cursi. no quiero q pienses mucho ya, solo mándame msg - te quiero te quiero te quiero te quiero te quiero te quiero te quiero no lo olvides
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Black_Prinze
╰(*´︶`*)╯♡ hi! I have just posted a new book titled “One Shots & Short Stories” (ik, A+ for title creativity). Anyways,, I wanted to let y’all know that Elliot & Dayon’s story from CYBMPC will be included in that book. I know it’s taken me forever to even put them out there but after much consideration I thought they’d fit best in a Short Story book rather than have their own book. Thank you for being so patient & I hope you like the works you find there! [please read the introduction chapter tho I beg u :>]
Tchils10
I'm hi I would like to know when the book about Jack from CYBMPC coming
Black_Prinze
hi hi ,, I’m currently working on a One-Shot & Short Story book (it isn’t published yet) but Jacks story will be the first few chapters of that book! I’m planning to post it before December ends so plz keep an eye out.
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