Dixondark

What do y’all think about my doom story? And is there any improvements I can do?
          	

Dixondark

@TheHolyPeanut173 Thanks! Unfortunately I don’t have any of that, However I did use AI in my new page to make some stuff (like the rooms) Along with the cyborg demon 
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TheHolyPeanut173

I think it’s great for a first story. The only critic I can say for the chapters is that they’re a little short. If you have SFM, gmod, or are a great artist, you can create some scenes from the story, I can give more ideas if you need any
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Dixondark

What do y’all think about my doom story? And is there any improvements I can do?
          

Dixondark

@TheHolyPeanut173 Thanks! Unfortunately I don’t have any of that, However I did use AI in my new page to make some stuff (like the rooms) Along with the cyborg demon 
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TheHolyPeanut173

I think it’s great for a first story. The only critic I can say for the chapters is that they’re a little short. If you have SFM, gmod, or are a great artist, you can create some scenes from the story, I can give more ideas if you need any
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