Give1234

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I already think about that but I will rewrite all shit grammar when the story go far from this also some word I use google translate in the grammar before I publish it I will check multiple time but it still wrong.Also thank so much from your comments every web I make a fanfic this is first time I got comments like this I will do my best
          	-Give 1234

councilcaesar74

@Give1234 are you going to continue space battleship rising?
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Give1234

@DDDZZZ000 My “Warm hug” chapter I think it the best chapter in my entire life in part of information what do you think but I think Roon is normally yandere I want her love raise from 0 to 100 because almost all Azurlane fanfic it made yandere  look bad you know that every yandere in azurlane fanfic their love for main protagonist is 100 but I want mine different in someways
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Give1234

@DDDZZZ000 Warm hug Roon and Yamato done kinda rush I feel like it I make a reason why roon like yamato and has a same feeling 
          	  (TBH he just pretend to don’t know)
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Give1234

this message may be offensive 
I already think about that but I will rewrite all shit grammar when the story go far from this also some word I use google translate in the grammar before I publish it I will check multiple time but it still wrong.Also thank so much from your comments every web I make a fanfic this is first time I got comments like this I will do my best
          -Give 1234

councilcaesar74

@Give1234 are you going to continue space battleship rising?
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Give1234

@DDDZZZ000 My “Warm hug” chapter I think it the best chapter in my entire life in part of information what do you think but I think Roon is normally yandere I want her love raise from 0 to 100 because almost all Azurlane fanfic it made yandere  look bad you know that every yandere in azurlane fanfic their love for main protagonist is 100 but I want mine different in someways
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Give1234

@DDDZZZ000 Warm hug Roon and Yamato done kinda rush I feel like it I make a reason why roon like yamato and has a same feeling 
            (TBH he just pretend to don’t know)
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DDDZZZ000

Hi, I am certain you should try writing stories properly before doing stuff like your Argo fan fiction. I just hope this anime's fan fiction just get good. 
          
          Also, I too suck but I am trying to achieve the best writing tho. Just telling you that you have to improve many times. 
          
          No clue? 
          
          Try reading other's works which have no ubiquitous drama dialogues like what you did. Yes, I like your attempt but you have to take all shits like grammar, sentence building and vocabulary!
          
          Try out supermushashi's work Azrael. You should also try out fanfiction.net. For real, the professionals was electric enough to demotivate me from doing my work!
          
          Or read mine . It is not so well but I am just saying for good. You want to do good story, then you need a big mind and some spicy touch of madness.
          
          I would want to see your Argo's prologue, how the battle was like (yes descriptive writing is challenging) and maybe realistic conversations. You cannot straight up say yes and legit join - that is why politics exist. 
          
          I hope you understand my lengthy critic. Even you don't get as much views, try your best. 
          
          I'll save it because of Space Battleship Yamato.
          
          Les go! (I'm bit crazy and troubled with my mind)