Hi! So for the review. I just finished reading "The Weasley Princess". It was over whelming on the parts of the Gringotts and new information, but still acceptable.
I think that every 'note' or part that you have a 'reminder', you should separate it from the content of the text from the story. Like bold it and put a distance from the text.
For me on first chapters, I would put like the characters in the story or their face claims and their personality, and a bit of information on the character. So that readers would know how to imagine and read that certain character.
It's really nice to have a new and well organized information that wasn't from the movies/books. I think if you are giving a new information or detail, you should take time to discuss it or elaborate it to the readers. Like put a chapter for all additional information so that others wouldn't get confuse on the sudden change of the plot.
On the other parts of the story like the details. It was very good. I don't really put into details on clothing or the house in my stories, because well I'm quite lazy on it. But I appreciate the details, it was also good as readers can imagine the detail on their own with your guide.
For me, when I write a story, I don't pressure myself to continue it or do it. I update my book every Wednesday, so it doesn't really pressure me, and I do have time for other chapters to change things. I don't usually mind others' opinions on my story, because well its mine and not theirs. And I write for entertainment.
Write what you want and what you believe in and imagine it. As long as you have the dedication to do it. Nothing will go wrong.
Also Thank you for reading "Weasley and Krum"!
- Aiyanna
