Mab-of-Winter

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Okay guys, I need some help! Which is the better synopsis?
          	
          	A: "The task was supposed to be simple, for all of its possible complications: force a treaty with the Master of Arlox, and if he refuses, kill him. Prevent a war from breaking out in the meantime. Come back home in time to watch the Queen die and her best friend inherit the crown.
          	
          	But nothing has ever been simple for Ashia, the Emissary of Aurora and protégée of the God of War. This proves to be no different, for the Master she has been assigned to kill is none other than the legendary Master Quen, who has defied all reason with his absurdly long lifespan and strange abilities. While more advanced kingdoms dismiss the rumors about him as superstition, Ashia knows the truth: he has magic. He is nearly immortal. And he might know the answers to questions she's been asking for most of her life -- if he doesn't kill her before she has a chance to learn them."
          	
          	
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          	B: "Just four years ago, the Auroran Kingdom led the world in its advancements of technology, fashion, and warfare. Then the Queen got sick.
          	
          	Ashia is the only appointed Emissary in Aurora, and has held the position for eight years. She loves her job, but sometimes her tasks are less-than-honorable. When the dying Queen orders her to force a treaty with a rivaling kingdom, Ashia is apprehensive about the possible ramifications, which could devastate the kingdom beyond repair. To add, this task puts her in a place that her past can reach, and it's only a matter of time before everything she's tried to forget will catch up to her, and destroy everything she's built for herself."
          	
          	If you've got time and an opinion, please let me know which one you think is better!

Mab-of-Winter

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Okay guys, I need some help! Which is the better synopsis?
          
          A: "The task was supposed to be simple, for all of its possible complications: force a treaty with the Master of Arlox, and if he refuses, kill him. Prevent a war from breaking out in the meantime. Come back home in time to watch the Queen die and her best friend inherit the crown.
          
          But nothing has ever been simple for Ashia, the Emissary of Aurora and protégée of the God of War. This proves to be no different, for the Master she has been assigned to kill is none other than the legendary Master Quen, who has defied all reason with his absurdly long lifespan and strange abilities. While more advanced kingdoms dismiss the rumors about him as superstition, Ashia knows the truth: he has magic. He is nearly immortal. And he might know the answers to questions she's been asking for most of her life -- if he doesn't kill her before she has a chance to learn them."
          
          
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          B: "Just four years ago, the Auroran Kingdom led the world in its advancements of technology, fashion, and warfare. Then the Queen got sick.
          
          Ashia is the only appointed Emissary in Aurora, and has held the position for eight years. She loves her job, but sometimes her tasks are less-than-honorable. When the dying Queen orders her to force a treaty with a rivaling kingdom, Ashia is apprehensive about the possible ramifications, which could devastate the kingdom beyond repair. To add, this task puts her in a place that her past can reach, and it's only a matter of time before everything she's tried to forget will catch up to her, and destroy everything she's built for herself."
          
          If you've got time and an opinion, please let me know which one you think is better!

Mab-of-Winter

I exercised today and now my kidney is taking its revenge. Don't exercise while you have a kidney infection folks

its_just_ananya

@Mab-of-Winter Hope you feel better now
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BookLover010107

@Mab-of-Winter I hope you get better :)
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Mab-of-Winter

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Kidney infections fucking suck.
          
          That is all.

BookLover010107

@Mab-of-Winter I will keep on praying for you : )
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FantasyBookLover2007

@Mab-of-Winter Get well!!!
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Mab-of-Winter

@BookLover010107 thank you! My doctor says I should be good in about ten days
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Mab-of-Winter

There are no spoilers in this, so don't worry! :)
          
          I just finished ACOSF and WOW. I'm a catatonic, sobbing mess to be honest. Sarah continues to do incredible work. This new insight into Nesta's character was very welcomed-- I never like how I portrayed her in ACOBAN, but didn't have enough understanding to do much with her. 
          
          This is honestly making me consider redoing ACOBAN (yes, a third time) with better insights into each character. Revamping the plot into something useable, maybe even something completely different, and committing to it. It won't be a top priority-- I still have my original works to think about-- but even just updating it a month at a time would be something. I know people are eager to have it back.
          
          But yeah, incredible story.

BookLover010107

@Mab-of-Winter  YES PLS!!!!!!!!!! I really want to read it.
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