dreamymansii
Hi @Mehr_writes I have been reading your book zindagi ke beech mein and to be honest I can see the potential this book has Like there are so many books out here that is about how two people met and got marriage and live happily ever after. But in your book, you are showing how even after 5 years of marriage, how things can be between husband and wife even when they have a child. In short your book is different from others so the storyline. There are so less book like this. So little suggestion if you like it take an action and if not that is ok. I as a reader what I felt about this book is just saying. You should rewrite this book with more clarity and also make changes in writing style to make it more interesting. And also if you are adult I would recommend you if you can then add detailed mature scenes between characters it will add more depth to the story like how they are portrayed in this book. They are distant but still connected through physical intimacy which is not enough in any marriage to keep going. And please don’t write everything in a single paragraph. Thank you
dreamymansii
@Mehr_writes I just hope I haven’t said anything to make you feel demotivated or upset about it
Mehr_writes
Right now, I’m writing organically—exploring the story myself as it comes to me, without a rigid outline. My main inspiration is to depict how some arranged marriages lack emotional connection, where couples stay together out of duty rather than love, and the challenges that come with it. For now, I’m treating this as a draft to capture those raw ideas.
That said, your feedback is valuable, and I’ll definitely keep it in mind as I refine the story further. If you have any specific scenes or elements you’d love to see, I’d be happy to hear them!
dreamymansii
@Mehr_writes I personally don’t like fast paced style, and if it is draft then it is ok but I think you should write it as proper book I know you are learning then why not start with this book itself