This is more of a personal thing, so you don’t necessarily need to work on that if you want to; the way the texts are centered was definitely something new for me. However, because I’m not used to reading a centered text, and because of that, it wasn’t super nice to the eye (but like I said, this is something more personal, so whether you want the texts in the center or on the left, it’s okay and I’ll respect it).
I remember in a few chapters where you described some descriptions of (y/n) like: “you turned red” or other things like that. While that may be fine for light skin people, it doesn’t really work for dark skin ones. Considering that a reader insert means that anyone could read it (so anyone that could be of colour, etc etc), you can replace it with something like this instead: “you felt your cheeks caught on fire” or “your face felt warm”. Same thing with the hair; when the description says: “put in a messy bun”, this doesn’t work either for people with 4c hair (or sometimes even people with short hair, like me). For this one, you don’t always have to give details about how (y/n)’s hair was done.
I think this is all I have for now, and if I ever somehow offended in any way, I’m really sorry. But besides those, I truly loved the development between Daisuke and (y/n). That’s the main part I loved, and I find it refreshing.
Have a good day/night!
