Heyy,
soo, I read your story and I think ist's really good. Everything is perfect, the only thing is, maybe you could add hyphons to dialogues, bc it's a little confusing when you don't know if someones talking or not :)
Have a good day<3
Hey,
danke für dein Follow hoffentlich findest du was geiles zum lesen.
Lass gerne Kritik und Verbesserungsvorschläge da.
Und fühl dich umarmt von mir
Deine Jacqueline^o^