I've gone in and done some editing on the first five chapters of "Fallen". To those who left comments, I thank you for all of your advice and opinions. Be assured that I took every one of them into account when making changes. Some advice I followed, some I chose to ignore, and some I kind of met halfway, altering things but not in the suggested way. All of your comments made me rethink my story in ways I hadn't thought of before, so I thank you all and hope that you will continue reading!