Bartholomew Blitz

I plan on posting drafts and pitching ideas for stories. What I want is feedback, or to have discussions to help refine or build on ideas. 

At the end of each segment I will provide a summary of the events of the chapter, or at least an explanation. This is here to show what really happens, and for you to tell me if it adds up with how it's shown in the story. 

Bartholomew Blitz is just the name of a character in a story yet to be made, and you'll know him when you see him; I would rather not put my name here yet. I am by no means an experienced writer nor do I claim to be. That's why I am here. I want to improve, so any constructive feedback is appreciated.