KaylaBabs

Hi darling
          
          I read a couple of chapters of your bookm i like your evy. She sounds so cute but i feel bad for her being let down by other people.
          
          However as a constructive critique of your book please dont take it negative.
          
          Your writing style is different from mine. If you ever read my first book you see i am not perfect 
          
          However you do a lot of description but no story telling. Its like you giving a lot of monolog but not expression. 
          
          And always remember to when characters are talking. 
          
          But it is a good first attempt. I can see the plot and the family dynamics. There is character development and rapport between mom and daughter. 
          
          PM me if you want to sent me a paragraph for me to review 
          
          
          Xx kayla

StunningNightmare

@KaylaBabs hey I need to ask u how do we tag a person in story cause I did but I think it didn't work
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StunningNightmare

@KaylaBabs I'll definitely send you for review once I write my current chapter 
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