kookiekookie010101
Hello! I hope you're having a nice day. The holidays are starting and I hope you will pass a great vacation. I was wondering if you could check out my book " truth or lie", read, vote and comment so I can know if I'm doing a good job. Thank you very much.
Swirlmongaming
@kookiekookie010101 I really like the plot of truth or lie! I want to suggest something’s, you don’t have to change anything if you don’t want. First thing is: Your trying to make the story funnier I suggest you add more things that your readers or you relate to so they can laugh and understand your jokes. Second thing is: there is lots of communication text in your story (not like it’s a bad thing) I suggest lessening the amount of speech you have (if you can) Last is: your tittles. I’ve learned from experience that if a reader that reads your story gets uninterested they will try to keep reading and click on the most interesting tittle for one chapter. Like your chapter “fight” has more views then the one before. This is because it’s an intriguing tittle. So this is why I suggest you add more intriguing titles so it captures the readers attention. Putting this to the side your book is very interesting and it is very well written for someone who says they’re not Talented.
