I just read Chapter one of your book Undwodra, and it is made clear to me that you are a very intense writer. Your usage of vocabulary and your phrasing is quite impressive. I only suggest that you work on the beginning. You get started very quickly, almost too eager to get to the main plot. I would like to see a little bit more of character structure, and a bit of information before we dive right in. This gives the readers a better understanding of events, and gives the reader the pleasure of watching the protagonist grow and change throughout the story, which is important when writing. Nevertheless, you are clearly talented and have strong plot ideas. Just be open to more that just your good plot idea. If you want to get me back for the criticism, it is suggested that you tell me how I did on my stories. Based on the way your story is written, I think you would most enjoy my novel, "The Day of Everything and Nothing." I wish you luck as you continue to write, and hope that this advice has helped you in any way, shape, or form.
