Hey guys!!!
So, I needed everyone's opinion for Ventures of Gem Land-4.
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The next day, however, Lucinda got so tired of it, that she finally snapped,
“I am sorry, okay? I know I am unwanted, hated, and you can’t help wish I were dead! I am sorry that was Jackson and not me, then you wouldn’t have to go through all of this trouble; you could’ve lived your life in peace because of the lack of my existence. But I’ll make it right, I’ll get Jack back and myself out of your lives for good! Just shut up for now! Or if you’re just so desperate to get rid of me, take this-” she handed him a knife and placed it under her throat. “-and kill me!”
Devin dropped the knife. “Your life’s useless, the least we can do is at least make sure your death would be of use.” Lucinda could see her eyes turning red in reflection in Devin’s glasses. “Your anger’s out of control, just as usual. You’re pathetic, Lucinda!”
“Which one of us here has anger issues, again? Right, you. So, you’re the last person who should be giving me speech about pathetic anger issues. And speaking of ‘pathetic’, this, whatever you are doing Walker, that is pathetic. Your stupid ego is pathetic. You’re so lucky I am handling this calmly, or I would’ve smashed your face against the wall you touched me.”
“And yet here we are. You’re weak,
So, I was writing this and I thought Devin wouldn't actually say this to Lucinda, like ever. For those who haven't read Alchemic Presage, they are kind of besties. You'll find out about it in that book.
What do you think? Is too much?