Hi! I just added your story to my library and so far I think it’s good. I’m a bit of a writer myself so I just wanna help with a bit of constructive criticism, and I think your story would be even better with more detail on things like background, character images, emotions, actions, and environments. Maybe add some wind or sound and how things would feel, hear or look to the readers to give them a better feel of things. Hopefully what I said will help. If you’re not interested in my help then I’m okay with that! Good luck!
Heyy, if you could check out my story and see if u like it or not it would mean a lot to me!:) I also wouldn't mind corrections to things and such, if u have any suggestions please feel free to say them haha also please vote for it :)