linneagymbunny

I havnt written in a while  should I share some more chapters this week?  also anything that is too hard to understand? Advice is appreciated 

waywardartist

@linneagymbunny why do Cyrus parents love each so much. like when Eve is getting her memory upload one of the side effect could be  that she relive those memory and anytime she is in the story you could have her relive a memory to add depth to the story
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waywardartist

@linneagymbunny I think is should be a slow burn it should be more curiosity and loneliness that make Cyrus want to be a round C and them and maybe the promise of food is why C is ok with seeing Cyrus, move in to a friendship.
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linneagymbunny

@waywardartist I really appreciate this criticism thank you so much 
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linneagymbunny

I havnt written in a while  should I share some more chapters this week?  also anything that is too hard to understand? Advice is appreciated 

waywardartist

@linneagymbunny why do Cyrus parents love each so much. like when Eve is getting her memory upload one of the side effect could be  that she relive those memory and anytime she is in the story you could have her relive a memory to add depth to the story
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waywardartist

@linneagymbunny I think is should be a slow burn it should be more curiosity and loneliness that make Cyrus want to be a round C and them and maybe the promise of food is why C is ok with seeing Cyrus, move in to a friendship.
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linneagymbunny

@waywardartist I really appreciate this criticism thank you so much 
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