teggielala

Hi, David. Happy new year to you! 
          Okay, so, I have this book I am currently writing. It is titled, 'More Than A Bestfriend'. I’d love for you to check it out and give me your reviews about the chapters. I want to know my flaws and my strength. 
          Many thanks to you.
          
          Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/189483940?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create_story_details&wp_uname=teggielala&wp_originator=YsiCeJ%2F3vecnSKPXiCf6FRRHSRAA6GQMKoF4tqsfKsm3Aqcf75CWlRXnKwQtsTYT3TTQf6Q78YV7lb0tLLUoCgP5WI6Y0Q01%2FoBcXH4X%2FrsUdAGZgQ%2FExF0MiPfHIb1Z
          
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VanshSharma156

Hello David. I checked out your story. I have only read 2 chapters till now but I can assure you that I'm already intrigued by it. The way you've written the 2nd chapter really got the game goin' . I also want to mention a thing about the introductory post of your story. I found it a bit confusing and messy, especially the second half of it. I think that it could be made more intriguing for the reader to make him start reading your story. Well, it could be just me but still I thought that I should give you an honest opinion. 

ratatat444

@VanshSharma156 Yeah I think it would work well with an intro section.  Thank you for the feedback!
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VanshSharma156

@VanshSharma156 , I really can't tell how , bcz I haven't been through all of it yet. But maybe, you can go with something short containing most of its matter about how a complete strange mystery man is going to change Chris' life or maybe something like that. If I get an idea about it, I'll let you know.
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ratatat444

@VanshSharma156 No it's a good point! I think the intro should probably be rewritten.  How would you do it?
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