Hey Rayna!
I done finished reading 00:00. I must say, you really do know how to hook an audience. It was an easy read, short and simple - nice. The pace of the narration was quite odd, it kinda felt like you were skipping a lotta things but then i thought perhaps you a rebel; you know, not one to follow a certain established way of carrying out a story. It worked out pretty great. You're one interesting writer.
I may be the only one but I swear I thought the narrator was a little kid. I was kinda shocked when i realized she was a teenager! I mean can you blame me, the way she narrated the story is child-like.
I definitely did not see the twist coming. that the nurse was also sick. It's sad but i guess that's what makes the story enjoyable. The immediate switch from first person narration to third person narration took me by surprise. I was like, "Who the hell is talking now!?" buh I get what you were trying to achieve.
Are your other stories this quick and short? I hope not. You're creative; I'll give you that. I just thought I'd let you know my thoughts, you know, writer to writer. I'm yet to share my work though. Hopefully, when I do, you'll offer me the same courtesy.
Keep writing!
