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underthestars232

Hey, I was wondering if you could read my new dystopian book World Left in Pieces. It’s my very first book and I want to improve. Comments and votes and shares would be appreciated. I’m looking for someone that could give me constructive criticism. Thank you so much for your time. 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/327826633?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=library&wp_uname=under_the_stars232&wp_originator=NIlGA9aTFhHESJ6OnskzIJBlKGczabbZ4kaORp71rqYZ%2FMSlgy51xSqjbG1xyGeroeMyhp7fU3Ef%2BIp6JaI1z4F051OAwsc6f64%2F5EGv7S404aUGNltvS6%2FI%2FFxD7K6H

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@ underthestars232  can't wait to read!
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Ayayay can’t wait  
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          The lesson of history is that no one ever learns. Edit your life frequently and ruthlessly. It's your masterpiece after all.
          There are some people you'll never see again. At least, not in the same way.
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          But the human heart is devious; the desire you have with no name. Fight for your own fairytale.
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          You can forgive yourself now. Wake up early. Drink coffee, work hard, be ambitious, your mind right and your head up.
          Do well, live well and dress well. Do what you love, love what you do.
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          This. This is the beginning of loving yourself. Welcome, Home.
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          Yours sincerely
          A mortal catching feelings like a damn amateur
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