Mentally Insane

Hey I'm a new writer here on wattpad and I would love for you to criticize my book  https://my.w.tt/V3EPPknFsP in a way that would help me make it better. 

Hello, what's up?

Yo your user name is p cool 

Thx 4 d follow

Ugh...

I'm booorred!!!!

@Miym_Uzumaki haaaaai!

I'm back everything is okay well not really but I will explain it to you.

Hey guys, I'm going to stop role-playing, this is ruining my life... and I don't want anything and happening to me so I might as well stop, I'm so sorry guys.

ANYONE WANNA ROOOLLLEEPLLLAAAY????