@xioaboi I'm glad that you accepted my suggestion. I'm a student, so I also might make mistakes, but this is a great opportunity for me to improve myself as well. Since English is not your first language, you made mistakes in both vocabulary and grammar. I regret to inform you that I can not help you with grammar right now as it will take time, and I have exams going on at the moment till 27th December. However, I can help you with vocabulary errors I found until now.
Some of the spelling mistakes you made and their corrections are :
1) During the Night-hunt of Wei Wuxian and Lan Wangji.
Pray - ❌️
Pray means to address God.
Prey - ✅️
Prey means an animal that is caught or killed ( in this case, corpses, ghosts, monsters, etc.).
2) Describing Lan Wangji's character. Cold-
Denominator - ❌️
The denominator is a mathematical value.
Demeanor - ✅️
Demeanor means outer behavior.
3) Describing Lan Wangji's life. His-
Piers - ❌️
Pier is a pillars platform projecting into sea or any water body.
Peers - ✅️
Peer is a person of the same age, status, or ability as the specified person.
4) Tiered - ❌️
Tiered means having rows or levels placed one above the other.
Tired - ✅️
Tired means in need of sleep or rest.
5) When Wei Ying was in danger.
Thread - ❌️
Thread is a long, thin strand of cotton, nylon, or other fibres.
Threat - ✅️
Threat (in this case) means a possibility of trouble, danger, or ruin.
Also, while writing the names of the characters, make sure to write the first letter of the name in capital letters since they are nouns. For example - Wei Wuxian, Wei Ying, Lan Zhan, Lan Wangji, Lan Xichen, Jiang Cheng.
Also, it's Wen Chao from Qishan Wen Sect.
These are some of the errors I remembered. I will address the rest of the vocabulary and grammar errors after I'm done with my exams.
Lastly, I do not mean to offend you with my message. I'm sorry if my message offended you in any way.