My Honest Book Reviews [CLOSED]

The Kidnapping

Cover: 3/5

Genre: Fanfiction

Fandom: Youtubers (it felt simpler to put it in this fandom)

Rating: Mature

Chapters Read: 4

Summary:

Just the average college girl with the average college life, until a very particular event takes place that turns it all upside down. It's a tiring climb to maintain your sanity, but you can get through having demons pointing a gun at your head. Can't you? The Kidnapping is a tale that not only traces and outlines the pure points in keeping your sanity when two demons have just named you their chattel. You may call it a survival guide, but it's really just a storybook. Because these characters can't be real. Can they?
The pressure of keeping your mouth shut, and the brutal awakening to the worst part of reality. You can't escape it. They may be the perfect ambassadors from hell, but really, they're just the worst kinds of torture in human form. Jack and Dark want you to kill their physical victims so that their hosts can live forever in their own form, but their aspirations become more realistic, and the outcome is more brutal than it was planned to be.

Grammar:

I didn't have a problem with the grammar, really. There were spelling errors (yes, I am counting the summary) and improper dialogue structure (I feel like a broken record saying this; the last two books had the same problem).

The vocabulary isn't very eye-catching. There are higher-level descriptions at some points, but that doesn't mean the vocabulary is better-than-average overall.

3.5/5

Plot:

I'm just gonna go ahead and say this. Anything x Reader doesn't appeal to me. Not in the slightest.

I understand that some people are really into certain fandoms and like to incorporate themselves into them by reading Blank x Readers, but I don't see the appeal. I think it's much more interesting seeing how another character would react, and reading how they think and develop throughout the story.

Besides, how would the author know how I would feel/act in a certain situation?

Okay, end rant.

Putting aside the whole reader's perspective aspect of the story, I'd like to put the plot— and only the plot— under the magnifying glass.

I was confused at first. I know Jack explained WHY he was kiddnaping, er . . . the reader? Let's just call the reader Stacy; it'll be more simpler that way.

Even though he explained why he was kidnapping Stacy, I was confused. It was a bit hard to wrap my head around who "them" and "these people" were.

If it weren't for the summary, I would've been lost and I wouldn't have known he was referring to the people Jack and Dark possessed.

I suggest editing that to make it more understandable.

I'd say the plot is bordering on original and cliche. On one hand, the protagonist, Stacy (reader), is being kidnapped.

It's a cliche and bland concept.

But, demons are kidnapping her, which brings a bit more flavor to it.

The fact that two Youtubers being possessed by demons are kidnapping her definitely makes it more intriguing, at the very best. I feel like this story could be better, had it not been from the perspective of the reader, but that's just me.

If the author likes the way it is, by all means, don't change it.

But, then again, this review is meant to give advice and not waste an hour of my time writing it.

I like that Sean and Mark each have conflicting alter egos, or the personalities of the demons possessing them. That's another silver lining.

3.5/5

Characters:

There isn't really much to mention here.

Mark and Sean have split personalities that belong to the demons possessing them. They obviously don't want to be possessed, because once the demons come out, they're forced to commit gruesome and depraved acts.

They express their regret and desire to prevent these things from happening to Stacy, and this creates a feeling of hopelessness. It shows their sense of character as well.

I apologize if this sounds insensitive, but I just couldn't keep a straight face while reading this. And that doesn't mean points off, but I watch their videos and it feels so weird reading this! 

Picturing Mark acting like that just made me crack up. Don't take that to heart, it had nothing to do with your story.

Just something I wanted to mention.

I don't really consider the reader a character I need to delve into, so I'll leave it at that.

5/5

Overall Rating:

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ (Actual Rating: 3.8/5)

Note to @rockirocki123

Don't mind my dislike for Blank x Readers, I just felt like I should say my bias outright, because it might help you understand why someone else might rate this higher than I did.

Your story is interesting. Not an unheard of concept, but not entirely repetitive and overused. I only suggest you edit the grammar mistakes in your summary and chapters.

I don't suggest this often, but working on the cover would definitely be the cherry on top.

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