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I'm Fine

Today I will be reviewing 'I'm Fine' by chocoplusicecream which is a story full of Drama, heartbreak and a sprinkle of Romance.

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Lets go!

○●○ C A S T ○●○

Due to the characters, Kriti, Fawad and Varun (main leads) are definitely perfectly chosen. Especially, Fawad and Kriti as he plays her younger brother (looks older due to his drinking habits) which in this story, he never respected her as an individual when younger.

The rest of the cast I feel don't need to be played by any, or not mainstream as I feel the rest are just supporting or useless, and this is where we move onto characters 》•••

○●○ C H A R A C T E R S ○●○

The three main leads play sweet and interesting characters which I find to be unique and relatable. There is a lack of feelings and emotions characters have towards each other, which is important in every story.

I love the idea of Aahil (Dhawan), who is a stunt artist/actor and I would like to know him more an emotional level. I feel he will have a big impact in Kavya's (Sanon's) life with the role he has been given.

○●○ S T O R Y L I N E ○●○

This is an simple, yet nice story. There is a good plot in which it focuses on Kavya (Sanon) and her struggles regarding her problomatic family, work and love life along with her feelings and keeping others happy around her.

Dialogues matter, and in this story there are some good dialogues but aren't many that stick in your head for the characters. Uneccesay dialogues between characters need to be avoided as this drags the story or doesn't connect with the story.

○●○ W R I T I N G ○●○

The reader has chosen easy language, which is good for many to read but would lack imagery.

Typo's and punctuation need to be taken care of as it's common and this can look unorganised for readers.

Description on facial expression are simple and doesn't mention why the character may feel such a way emotionally.

At times, I felt confused whilst reading about what the character thinks, feels or what is exactly happening as at times it wasn't clear. 

○●○ S U G G E S T I O N S ○●○

- Apart from the three main actors, the rest are not needed in this story unless they are supporting strongly then I suggest a not so mainstream cast or non. Having a huge cast for characters that don't affect the plot and are only used for communication, are not needed as this can confuse people.

- Try to make sense of the situation and make sure scenes connect with the story and have an impact on the characters or the relationship between them, or this will confuse your readers.

- your story title should be changed from 'I am Fine' to 'I'm Fine.'

- Proof read work. Make sure there are spaces when after a (,) and a space  after a (.) Is used. Elipses (...) can be avoided. Only use if necessary.

- Try to go for different word choices rather than the same one and add descriptive actions as to why what's being done.

○●○ AUTHORS NOTE ○●○

I hope this helped you and the advice and points I have given (purely my opinion) will help develop the book.

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Until next time...

Byeeeeee

~ Sal