LeAmberTail Reviews Starkit's Prophecy

"ALLIANCES"

(That's not how you spell it...)

Ok so like i said this is my first story so be nice plz (Fat chance)

btw its set afte rsunset so (New book?I wasn't aware that Rsunset was a book!)

ThunderClan

Leader: Firestar ginger tom with a flame colored pelt (YOU DON'T SAY?)

Deputy : Brambleclaw dark brown tabby tom with amber eyes

Medicine cat: Jayfeather gray tom (Isn't there a bit more than that?)

Warriors: 

SqurrelFlight ginger she-cat (She'a a senior warrior?)

Apprentice Foxpaw

(The rest is pretty good until...)

Foxheart reddish tabby tom (I THOUGHT HE WAS AN APPRENTICE?)

IceFire white she cat (Once again,an apprentice)

Toadribbit black and white tom (gg)

Roseflame dark cream she-cat (Nice name,but STILL NOT THE ACTUAL ONE)

BriarStorm dark brown she-cat (What about her paralyzed back legs?)

Bumbleflower very pale gray tom with black stripe (Very manly name)

Blossomwind  pale brown she-cat with a dark brown stripe along her spine (Once again,nice name,BUT NOT THE ACTUAL ONE)

Apprentices :

Fox DaisyPaw Cream she-cat from the horseplace (Wut)

Flamepaw Dark red she-cat with one gnree eye and one Blu eye (Didn't know those colors existed)

Lakepaw bright blue gray she-cat with blue eyes

The last 2 r Starkits siters (Okay...)

Jazzpaw red she cat with blue eyes and a black tail (...no comment.)

Queens :

Ferncloud pale gray with darker flecks she cat mother of Dustpelt's kits (who are....)

Dawnsparkle bright tortishell she cat with gargutan (...) blu eyes mother of Jayfeather's kits formerly of Shadowclan (Jayfeather wouldn't have kits...)

Kits :

Starkit graysh blue purple she cat with molting orange eyes and a gold star on her foarhead (scary.)

The rest of this is pretty good,so :P.But the one's I pointed out are...just wow.

-LeAmbertail