OC Reviews

Isabelle Marley Moore

"(Just want to say the backstory is probably a bit rushed)
That's Okay
Fandom: Original
Name: Isabelle Marley Moore 
Nice name!
Age: 12
Oh geez, I'm sorry I have a thing with 18 and under aged OCs, unless there is a good reason for it
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Heterosexual
Nice...Nice

Appearance: Long, wavy brown hair ending just above the waist with dark brown eyes. She has freckles scattered around her face but is most noticeable on her nose. She normally wears black, white or grey clothes which are usually a white blouse, black skirt, black boots and a grey sweater. Her weight is average but sometimes goes down for a bit if she isn't allowed food (one of the punishments for bad grades). Try add more detail like height, her actual weight in lbs ( Pounds ), shoe size (?) Also having her wear all black/grey/white clothing makes her seems a bit 'edgy' in a way.

Personality: Smart, sneaky, honest, obedient, can get scared easily. People assume she is a show off because of her getting the answers correct all the time (with few errors) I like how her personality has negatives like sneaky and that people assume she is a show-off, good job :)

Species: Human
Occupation: Student at middle school. I have like zilch idea what age you are at middle school ( Guessing 12 ) because I'm British

Backstory: When she was 2, her father left the family. Father leaving the family is a Mary Sue trait, as they ALWAYS have a sad past, but again, if for a good reason that's okay Her mother was struggling with looking after them and dealing with the looks and comments she got from other people for being a single mum and their children having better scores than hers. She wanted her children to be the best. She pushed them too hard. At first, she stood up to her mum to defend her brother but after a few years, she just did what her mother told her to do with her brother (noah) defending her. Daaamnnn....Sounds like a nice mum...

Scars/Birthmarks: Has a long scar running down her arm from biking too close to a metal fence. Reminds me of my mother who smashed her head into a brick wall when she was on a scooter at the age of 7 She has a birthmark which is a medium size that looks like a fried egg on her right shoulder. Hmm, fried eggs :P

Likes: Climbing trees, playing the guitar (but she can't play it), Same bro Dodgeball (as she can hit people she dislikes), I do this as well :D sweets (candy) and taking photos.
I also like how most of her likes are not the ones associated with her gender e.g. Climbing trees, playing Dodgeball and the guitar are generally considered as what boys do

Dislikes: Sea creatures and plants, Small areas, insects and animals that fly. So birds? Also a tip, you could develop one of these into a phobia e.g.. Small areas = Claustrophobia
Any Health Issues: Allergic to insect stings. Oh god this reminds me of My Girl D:

Other: She has a twin brother called Noah and two older sisters called Emma (16) and Rebecca (13). Oh thank GOD they are alive. Emma normally stays with her dad and Rebecca lives up to her mother's expectations with a few slips which just end with a slight telling off.

Overall Grade: A

Mary Sue: 3% For the backstory, due to the leaving father and the problems with her mother also the age

Original: 97%

Overall Thoughts: This is a really good OC, I love it! The name is a amazing and the backstory is actually really good. Your OC's personality shows that she isn't loved by everyone as most people don't love show offs :) Try add more detail into your appearance though and try giving her a phobia/fear of something and ( Unless it's for a good reason ) age her up a bit as one part of being a Mary/Gary Sue/Stu is being generally under or at the age of 18