Galaxy Kookies ent.

Audition #10

Name: Nimi
Face: Park Bom
Age: 20
Band/solo: Solo
Songwriting theme: Love, sad, freedom.
Birthday: December 25th
Personality: cool, calm, bubbly, brave, timid, hardworking, troublesome and funny.
Song:
One day
Verse1
I needed help but you weren't there
To comfort me, many days I cry you weren't
There to make me smile. But when you
Left everything became dead. Until that one
Day sitting in the dark I heard someone say I will
Save you one more time baby because I love you.

Chorus
Until that one day, my cries stop
When he told me that he will rescue from
This painful love and on that one day he said
I will protect you..................... when things
Get rough and I will love you woo...........

Verse2
When I looked around I saw an angel
Watching me eye to eye, he came up
To me and held me tightly I felt warm
Like a baby in his gentle arms and he said
Finally I found you.................
I will never stop caring for you my love
I will protect you one more time.................

Chorus
Until that one day, my crying stops
When he told that he will rescue from
This painful love and on that one day he said
I will protect you..................... when things
Get rough and he said I will love you woo...........
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I think you should try to put full stops at the end of a sentence and don't put too much dots. The song was abit confusing. When I sang with my own made up melody, it was nice and easy to flow, but it can't make sense, because to make the song flow, I had to cut the sentence. Try to put less words in one line. Overall, the song was nice.
7/10