Feedbackplease Stories

So, I've been working on a few different stories recently to improve my writing, many of which being JJK stories! None of them have progressed much (I think the longest...

Shane Gastling must cross to the most dangerous part of his land to defeat an enemy more powerful than any, the Immortal Master. He must hurry, before the Master's army...

Hello! this is my first time sharing any of my poetry online. I usually keep my poetry private so yeaa. I am still learning to revise and make my pieces better s...

First it was the dreams. It's how he communicated with me. Now, it's more than dreams. And it's real. If I want to get out of this alive, do I trust him? Or do I trust...

The story of a young girl growing up with her cold hearted mother. Follow her life as she grows up in two different worlds. Her home life and her school life.

Note on this first part of my ultimate story and first piece, any of my writings are to be approached with an open mind and are made as 'food for thought', for it is you...

Short story. I would love to hear your feedback and constructive criticism on improving my short story. Thank you :)

Idk yet. this was based off a dream that I had last night

just some stuff I wrote that I need constructive criticism, feedback and tips for please give me ur opinion!!!!!

-Mia: sweet, kind, unpopular -Toby:secertly likes Mia, kind, somewhat popular -Ryan: total badboy, popular. Mia fall in what she thinks is love with her best friend's en...

Here I will upload ... Stories for school! never woulda guessed huh?

Murder Mystery. Part 3 done! Will add more soon. First piece, please give feedback NO HATE. ~Updated 1/1/17

This is a fantasy story about a boy living in a land ruled by a tyrant. Poverty, and crime are rampant in the streets and he took to stealing for survival but gets caugh...

In 1996, A young man with a quiet life makes a strange discovery that alters his sense of reality; nothing makes sense, as he is somehow transported into the future- all...

life, thoughts. everything summed up into 917 characters. you wouldn't understand much but, let your mind soak up the words and take them to heart just a little bit.

Short stories for several other stories I'm writing. Give me feedback. Some spoilers may be in order.