Jane R. E. O.

Do you promote your books on Neobook ?

Since you wanted to post publicly on my story, let me match that energy. Your religion is yours, and my writing is mine. Spew some Christianity bs on my work again and things will get devious. Not to mention your incredibly racist takes on a book that has black women as the focal. Like what was the reason?

Thank you for the feedback. Since right now what’s going is on is pretty shaky and if I suddenly just start explaining things it will be uncomfortable for me, I will progressively include more plot every chapter until at the end of the story, everything shall make sense. Well, hopefully. 
          And since there is basically no plot, would you mind if I included you by an alias in the story? Perhaps a minor role, as I am not very well aware of your personality, but certainly one that impacts Portman’s decisions.
          And also in case you don’t already know this (by your comment of feedback in which you suggested that Portman is the main character, albeit not directly): Portman is one of the main characters. But as you may have noticed—although the plot is shallow—the title of my story is called Eyes. So, the Eyes are actually the main characters. Hopefully that makes sense. 
          Portman is very important, and without him, the Eyes will not be where they are at the end of the story, but he is not the main character.

I dedicated Play3 to you. If you don’t want that I can take it off. And I went with Littlegod33 as it shows your account.
          Hopefully you are all right with that.

Can I dedicate a Play to you? And if so, would you like to be called Sista, Jane Reo, Jane R. E. O., Littlegod33 or any other names you would prefer?
          And if you don’t want anything dedicated to you at all, that is fine too.

So what did you think of the story? It’s not finished, I just want to know what you honestly think of it.
          Was it amusing, funny, a bit dark?
          I know the plot wasn’t very good, I just wanted to write something with death and eyes in it. I like eyes, you see. I like them quite a lot. 
          But apart from that, and the ‘it’ you pointed out in the first chapter, do you think there can be improvements? I know you can always improve your writing, just simply what you think could be better. 
          Something to work on. Or I’ll try to work on it, at any rate. I might not, as the story has a sort of style. But if it goes along I’ll try (it’s not that easy for me to switch the style of how I write), or maybe I’ll change it for a chapter and if I was pleased with that, change it to that style. 
          Or just what you think. Honestly. 
          If you think it’s awful, say that, please. I want to know your honest opinions.

As a new writer, would you mind reading my story and giving some feedback?

And yes, Chasing Elysian reached 252 comment XD. My road into the fictional world has officially commenced! Acc it started long ago. But eh 

I AM EXCITED TO ANNOUNCE THAT [CHASING ELYSIAN] HAS REACHED 200 VIEWS AND 130 VOTES! A MILESTONE, YES. (人*´∀｀)｡*ﾟ+
          
          Thanking all my readers and voters who stayed through the novel not excluding those who gave it a try. Arigato! Merci! Wese! (Last one my native language if you're wondering) 
          
          T H A N K  Y O U. 
          
          Be blessed, beloved. (◍•ᴗ•◍)❤
          
             --Jane Reo.

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