Sweet Like Chocolate 18+ (Timeskip!Tendou Satori X Shy!OC) NSFW

11: Taking Charge

Chapter 11

"Y/n, I understand that you've gained 'some' experience but... in the previous stories you've drafted and these new ones... I realised that only the female characters seem to be on the receiving end! You don't describe the male characters penises at all! There still isn't any penetration, no mentions of oral sex... It's always cunnilingus and fingering! It's too repetitive!" She said, pointing to all the red pen marks she drew on Y/n's rough drafts.

Y/n gulped, there were a lot of red comments scattered on the pages. She was flushing at how casual and loud Ohno was in discussing sex. But then again, she was a renowned erotica novelist...

"Y/n, you've been with Tendou for two months nearly? How's your sex life been so far?" She asked and Y/n flushed, eyes widening at how direct her was.

"I-I... we... um..." She stuttered, avoiding looking into Ohno's eyes

"...W-We haven't... gone.... all the way..." She said reluctantly, making Ohno's mouth open a little, at a loss for words. She had assumed with how infatuated Y/n was with her boyfriend, that they would've had sex by now, but she was not one to make Y/n feel bad about that. She simply nodded

"That's alright, so what do you guys do then?" She asked, genuinely interested. Y/n began playing with her fingers, a light hue on her face

"We walk home together after work and when we are free, we go on dates... Satori knows I'm uncomfortable in public settings alone, so he's been trying to help me experience Tokyo, with him. It's been really nice; I've seen so many things and places that I didn't know existed here!" She revealed and Ohno smiled,

"That's pretty cute, where'd he recently take you?" She asked. Y/n smiled, laughing lightly

"We went to an arcade last night!"

"An arcade?"

Y/n nodded happily,

"Yeah! Satori decided that since he's my first boyfriend... he wanted us to have fun like we were teenagers. You know, trying to give me a high school experience? He's showing me what I missed out on... So, we've been doing some pretty fun things!"

Ohno grinned, thinking for a second

"That's so sweet of him... Ah, to be young again..." Ohno sighed dreamily, a nostalgic look in her eyes as she lit, yet another cigarette. Her eyes were glued to her cigarette as she twirled it between her fingers. She seemed like she wanted to say something, but she went back to being professional

"Y/n, your need to be more descriptive with describing your male characters. Remember, your readers look forward to the smut. Every single detail counts. Every sound, movement, emotion and body part. Look at all the red markers I've made on the draft." She pointed to the draft, making Y/n concentrate on all the red marks

"The smut in your drafts are quite repetitive. You've stuck to just finger play and oral for the female character. If the readers wanted to visualise that, they might as well go watch a porno... Readers need the details to visualise. Erotic literature has a large fan base too. People like to read the intimate details they can catch through the power of words. You can't pick up feelings from porn, that's all acting! Literature has the power to make people really feel a connection, which is why I think you need to start writing about the female protagonist taking charge too!" She said, leaning back in her chair as her gaze was locked on Y/n's. Watching the younger woman get flustered. She laughed, dismissing Y/n to her desk. Y/n was deep in thought as she sat on her chair, staring at the pen marks on the drafts...

Despite Tendou and her dating for almost two months, they never went all the way... On the night they confessed, she thought she was going to spend the night with him, but she ended up chickening out.