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—Note that the girls referred to in the first paragraph are the maidens, better if you just say maidens to avoid confusion because you also referred to the child as girl.
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—You wrote, "the most important night of their lives" but I didn't read why it's important, also what is terrifying these young girls?
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—What is magisk? It was never really explained throughout the story.
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—Since you are not naming any of the maiden nor the child, be specific here. To avoid head-hopping, note this in the future especially in using 3rd PO
