Reviews and reviews!

2. The Forbidden Golden Five And The Philosopher's Stone.

By Cassiopeia_Lestrange

1. Cover - 10/10.
Girl, the cover is amazing!!
Chef's kiss<3

2. Title - 9/10.
The title is cool and sounds good! But it's a bit too long. Good job!

3. Description - 10/10.
I like the description, it doesn't give out the whole story! And it also gives you the basic idea of what the story holds. Good job!

4. Character and Plot - 10/10.
I like how you've given the characters names, personalities, and roles! For the plot, as you said that it's mainly to show the day-to-day struggles of the main characters and the normal philosopher's stone movie- I think you did pretty good.^^

5. Writing style and Grammar - 8.5/10.
Overall, the writing style is joyous. It's fun and easy to read. The dialogues are well written, makes it easy to understand for the readers. There are a few errors in which you put the comma "," at the wrong place. So just to be sure, before publishing your chapter, try to do a preview of it. I also like how you use "[-]" brackets - try to put the brackets in the line after the dialogue - that way it would look even better!

6. Creativity - 8/10.
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7. Originality - 8/10.
For both creativity and originality - I like the overall idea of your book, also how you created and thought about Cassie and Astrea's hardships and more. But other than that, let's be real, it's a fan-fiction, I get that, but it doesn't seem too original.

8. Review of EACH chapter thoroughly:

Chapter 1:
I like the way you started off the chapter, it's well structured and the use of different fonts makes it aesthetic to read. +1

The introduction of different families was done neatly, their emotions were well shown in the writing. Be it the muggles, malfoys, or weasleys. All had a different reaction even though they were going to the same place - which shows their different characters, personalities and way to show their emotions. +1

I also like how you've talked about their physical appearance too, where you mentioned the different features of the Malfoy twins or red-haired weasley. All were easy to understand and I was able to imagine them well. +1

The chapter felt like an introductory chapter, it wasn't boring but it wasn't very interesting too.
But if I was a hard Harry Potter fan — I would definitely read it. +1

Chapter 2:
I like the author's notes that you put, it's always good to engage with your readers every now and then!:) +1

Mmmh, the overall chapter felt like a filler to me, though we'll written!

It almost felt like a drama script, which is kinda cute. +1

I don't have much to say about this chapter, since it's written in dialogue forms and all. But it was a nice filler, good to read. +1

Chapter 3:
I love the way you've given every chapter a title! Makes the reader curious as to what this particular chapter may hold. +1

Once again, it was just the sorting ceremony. Could've been shorter and a better plot could have been added. -1

Though if only talking about the ceremony, it was well written. Didn't see a single grammar mistake or anything, so that's cool. +1

It honestly does feels like a drama/movie script. There's excess of dialogues and lack of expressions/emotions. -1

But if the story is meant to be in a script form— then hey! You're doing a great job at that! +1

>>Overall liking of book 90/100.
Good job! Keep it up!!^^