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✦ { Maude } Prisoner of Past

Client: DeathBlade__

Reviewer: -Untactful_Criminal

Introduction: 8/10

> - Blurb:

The blurb is a bit long for Wattpad blurbs. I think some of it can be removed unless it is of vital importance, such as mention of Nina's home. Otherwise, the blurb is well-written and easy to understand without giving away too much of the book. It's nice to see an author use their title in a meaningful way that doesn't sound cheeky.

> - Prologue:

N/A. I might suggest something that will lead to the end. Prologues are great hookers and you can do anything in them, as long as it connects to the story.

> - First couple chapters:

Despite what you said in your author's note in one of the chapters, I think the story starts off fast. I enjoy a book full of action, especially when it's executed as smoothly as you did it. I would say the first couple of chapters raised a lot of questions that we hope to answer in the future. Writing a mystery is not an easy task but you are making it look like a piece of cake. When I read the first couple of chapters, I was captivated and excited for what was waiting ahead for me.

> - Hook:

Like I said above, there was a gnawing presence waiting to be unleashed. I was excited to keep reading on, because you were able to fully capture your audience with little information. It feels good reading a book that doesn't lore dump on you in the first couple of chapters. I also enjoyed how you introduced Nina and Elias

Graphics: 4/5

> - Cover:

The cover is very pretty and gives off a fantasy vibe. I don't like the man in it though. It sticks out in a way that kind of takes away from the vibe. I'd just remove him.

> - Banners (if included):

Very pretty banners. My only suggestion is having your name somewhere on it to avoid screenshots for some weirdo to steal.

> - Character Aesthetics (if included):

I like a collage that really speaks to the story. I think the aesthetics should have matched the cover and banners a little more. With the font, at least.

Nina's aesthetic was a little too dark to see it clearly. I'm not sure about some of the images and how they relate back to her. A crowd of hands relates to her, how? Maybe I have not reached this point yet in the book. The hearts seem to signify a deep romance. I'm not sure if that's the vibe you want to give off. Try not to use more than one font on an aesthetic either.

I think the fonts should match for both aesthetics. I like Elias's images more, as it feels more relatable to him.

I think the filters are distorting your images, giving them a weird look. The matching borders give off romance vibes, which I don't think is your intention. Maybe, it is. If that's the case, ignore me.

The trailer was really cool to watch.

Body: 45/50