Warriors ~ OC Rater (discontinued)

Dawnheart and Gingerfang/star

Owner: 

@XxCottonCandyxX

Name: Dawnheart

Reason for name: Her parents requested the suffix heart because she was like an awakening in their hearts.

Aww, that's cute

Gender: Female

She-cats may be overused but that doesn't mean I don't like them :)

Appearance: A gray tabby she-cat with white paws, a white tail tip, a white belly and a white chest, with soft green eyes.

Again, the green eyes :D This appearance sounds so cute!

Sexuality: Bi

:)

Personality/traits: Kind, soft, forgiving

This is ok. I don't see any bad traits though, so you could give her some

Family: Gingerfang/star (Mate) Fawntail (Kit) Deerstripe (Kit) Frostfoot (Mom) Wrenfeather (Dad) Icefur (Sister) Drewkit (Brother)

Only Frostfoot and Icefur died, so she still has a pretty big happy family. The same goes for this as it did for Mudcloud :)

Crush: (Mate) Gingerfang/starBackstory: she was born to her ShadowClan mother in ThunderClan, and lived a pretty normal life. Although she had torn herself up when Frostfoot and Icefur died.

Parents changing clans isn't something I see often. Neither is a normal life! Sure, we all love the dramatic stories with wars and prophecies and powers and all that stuff - But there's nothing wrong with a normal cat! The backstory is short but I suppose there's not much to tell

How others perceive them: Kind, too soft, unloyal

Unloyal? That's interesting! Is it because of her ShadowClan mother? I like it

Skills: Very good at swimming, normal at climbing, bad at fighting and normal at hunting.

Aha, bad at fighting! There's a flaw :)

Rank: Warrior

Clan: ThunderClan

Age: (As of death) 31 moons

Cause of death: She had strayed into ShadowClan territory to look at fireflies like she had so many times before. This time, Amberstar and Gingerfang caught her. She told them to get help, as a ShadowClan patrol found them. She was killed by the patrol soon after.

Wow! ShadowClan is savage XD I don't blame her though, fireflies are pretty!

Total rating: 7/10

She doesn't have as many flaws as I like in a cat, and her backstory was a bit average, but that doesn't mean I don't like her! She's still cool!

Name: Gingerfang(star)Reason for name: He was born a more ginger kit, but after all his time at sunningrocks his fur was sun bleached. His suffix was for his sassiness.

That's interesting! I've never seen a sun-bleached warrior cat before! :D

Gender: Male

Appearance: A brown tabby tom with green eyes

Pretty simple :) though wouldn't the sun make his fur lighter?

Sexuality: Straight

Fair enough ;D

Personality/traits: Sassy, vengeful

Ok, good, good...

Family: Dawnheart(Mate) Fawntail(Kit) Deerstripe(kit) Gorsefall(kit) Honeyrose(kit) Amberflame(Second mate) Hareleap(Brother) Crush: (Mates) Dawnheart and Amberflame

So in case anyone is confused, Amberflame was his mate after Dawnheart died.

Backstory: He was born into the clan as a normal kit, and eventually developed feelings for Dawnheart.

Again, short, but it's okay

How others perceive him: Sassy, unloyal, father of an evil cat

:D Evil cat father! Hey, I like this! Its been seen sometimes but it's not a super cliche thing.

Skills: He's great at leading, hunting, and fighting, but horrible at swimming

Well that's fair enough, as he's no RiverClan cat

Rank: Leader

Cool

Clan: ThunderClan

Age: (As of death) 49 Moons

Cause of death: Dogs while searching for catmint in a twoleg garden.

Shouldn't the medicine cat be doing that? XD But no it's good often people just say that they found catmint in the wild but twoleg garden is pretty good :)

Total rating: 6/10 

He didn't have the most exciting story but he was ok