Name: Lostleg
Okay
Looks: pretty white she-cat with grey eyes and was born with out a let
Nice, now clue on the eyes, to be true I don't know much about eyes, that's sad that she was born without a let, unusual but I like it.
Age: 17 moons
Nice and young
Rank: warrior
Well I did guess that this she-cat was a med cat, but Lostleg is a warrior, that interesting, you might want to add about the struggles she has growing up to be a warrior in her backstory.
Clan: Thunderclan
Cool I get a lot, well I've seen a lot of the original clans but there fine as most of my OC'S are from the original clans lol
Personality: a stubborn, hard to beat, loyal cat, bad at hunting and good at fighting, very bubble and bright
That interesting about the fighting and hunting, it's also the same with one of my OC'S, it's nice to see that she is bubbly and bright although only having three legs.
Kin: has no known kin. Will be explained in the backstory.
Okay then
Backstory:
Lostleg was found on twolegs place border when she was two moons.
Was this inside or outside the twoleg fences I'm guess
She was alone and wondering in the middle in the middle of leaf bare.
Now what was a kit her age wondering around the forest for, what about her parents
She was taken to Thunderclan and was raised there.
You might want to add that they found her, just to make it more clear
Only the Thunderclan leader, medicine cat and the cat that found her knew she was not a clan cat.
You might want to name these cats names, and I'm just guessing but were they the only cat that knew so they could protect her or something like this. And did Lostleg now her background?.
(The cat who found her was a nursery queen)
Did this queen have a litter when she found Lostleg.
Okay over all pretty good. One you might just want to explain a bit more about her three legs and how it effects her. Two just more information in general, e.g. What are the names of the cats that know her secret and so on and forth. I would rate this a 7/10 hope I helped and if there's anything that I left out please tell me 🤔
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