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A screenshot from the now taken down "Song of Nature," that, as you guessed, has nothing to do with singing or nature.
"The entitlement you have is insane." A quote by Nezzie Monster. When your protagonists "suffering" is "not being satisfied with gifts", then you have some problems. The only person who thinks she's "suffering" is her, everyone else thinks she's a pretentious entitled asshole. Also, it's never explained what the magic system is, we're just expected to know because... reasons.
"The thing is that if this was written by someone else, it could be a really interesting story that teaches us about the POV of this almost sociopathic kid. How he thinks, why he thinks that way; it could be good. But it's WRITTEN BY SOMEONE WHO DOESN'T EVEN REALIZE IT'S AN ISSUE."
The problem with the authors notes in "When the Stars Align" were that they saw nothing wrong with the story besides "tropes and cliches". If they said "I didn't introduce anything", or "these kids are so whiny, why did I write them all to cry for the entire chapter and ignore the plot?" Then that's a respectable level of self-awareness. Too bad she's too incompetent to do that.
Quotes by Kappa Kaiju from his Reapers Creek review that apply to all these stories:
"The last book of his I read was a learning experience for all of us, and I learned that if... if it bores me, I'm going to start skipping things."
"It's written like we knew that, but we most certainly didn't."
"We're half-way through, which is the perfect time to have the first interesting thing happen."
"Writing a perfect Mary Sue character leaves little headroom for growth."
"Greg struggles to write superpowers in any way that would give the readers a general understanding of what's happening."
"The rest of the paragraph is basically just gibberish."
"Seeing characters develop over time is boring."
"Greg doesn't think too hard when he writes, does he?"
"Three pointless paragraphs, you shouldn't have."
"I did indeed recognize the words, as a sentence, not so much."
"He has these powers, with no foreshadowing."
"He's not Greg's self insert or anyone he sleeps with, so of course he's the devil."
"This chapter had the ability to be interesting, but much like the rest of this book, I hate it."
You know, you should do something if multiple quotes from a review about the worst book in history can be applied to your story. And this is one video from Kapp Kaiju, I could apply more if I used his other video and from the other channels who review Greg's work. That's NOT GOOD.
Here's some from a different video of Kappa Kaiju's.
"Greg writes him as this always good, always right, super powerful character. He might as well be god....He's like Goku, but I hate him."
