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3rd Place
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This is an absolutely fantastic concept with such an intriguing story it hooked me right from the blurb. The whole concept of Death being a mother and father to these kids and physically appearing as a mom or dad depending on the kids is really really interesting. In general, the entire village and the interactions the kids have with Death subverts expectations in a natural way that doesn't feel like you're forcing it for shock value. Death him/herself is such a fun character to read about, and I really loved it.
This may be the concept that personally appealed to me the most, and I think it was such a creative idea. I'd be curious to know how you came up with it and what the process of fleshing out this idea was like. Seriously, kudos. Really interesting concept that will pull anyone in just by reading the blurb.
I have a couple of critiques.
There is way too much exposition in the first chapter, and within that exposition, it jumps around a lot. It goes from Death being a parent to talking about Zola to talking about Remi's place in the village. Almost the entire chapter is exposition, and while the concept is interesting, the first chapter's job is to hook readers in, so if it's all exposition, it can be tiring to read and unengaging. You tell us all there is to know about the village and don't give us a chance to figure it out on our own. I would recommend doing more showing over telling and using the first chapter as an opportunity to introduce the plot and the characters' relations to said plot. Of course you can give exposition and worldbuilding, but I would strongly recommend not doing it to the point where it's the entire chapter.
